• Ftumch@lemmy.todayEnglish
    16·
    2 days ago

    Ackshually, since it doesn’t contain a seasonal reference, that is technically not a haiku but a senryū!

    • Sergio@piefed.socialEnglish
      8·
      1 day ago

      you’re right. Here’s a revision:

      HOHOHOHOHO
      HOHOHOHOHOHOHO
      HOHOHOFUCKER

      The season is winter (“ho ho ho” referring to Santa Claus)

      • Ftumch@lemmy.todayEnglish
        9·
        2 days ago

        I suppose the “HAHAHAFUCKER” bit does make that context pretty clear. I stand corrected.

    • threeonefour@piefed.caEnglish
      7·
      2 days ago

      English haiku don’t follow the Japanese rules because a bunch of them rely on language features that don’t exist in English. The haiku structure taught in western schools isn’t a form actual poets use often.

      Wiki has some examples of English haiku that dont follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern, nor reference to season, but still capture the essence of expressing an abstract thought with minimal language by presenting two short unlinked statements. The last lines of these poems arent explicitly connected to the first two. The reader is left to speculate on the link between them.

      old home
      the light we’d leave
      on, off

      beam by beam
      the old barn taken down
      to sky